Editing Questions

1. The strengths of my partners essay were that she did a very good job of using descriptions to describe what she was feeling towards her grandma. I really felt like I knew her grandma because she did such a good job of describing how she was.
2. To improve this narrative, she can use more descriptions when she was saying what she did with her grandma.
3. Erica didn't have any literary devices in this narrative, so she will have to add those in to give mroe depth to the story.
4. The catchiest part of the story was in the end when she was saying how inspiring her grandma was, and how much she influenced her life.

Helen Keller Response

1. I thought this narrative was very interesting. I never knew how Helen started to learn, so this narrative gave me a good description on how she started to be able to put connections between words and objects.
2. The most interesting thing about this narrative was how she began to learn. It is remarkable that someone that can't hear or see can learn so many new things. It was important that Helen never gave up on what she was doing, so she always kept at it even though it was hard for her.
3. What surprised me was that she never gave up. If I was in that situation I would most likely get too frustrated to continue because I'm sure it is so hard to try to learn when you can't understand since she was blind and deaf.
4. I never really knew much about Helen Keller, so this narrative did change my look on her because I learned how dedicated she was to learning and that she didn't give up.
5. Imagery: "The afternoon sun penetrated the mass of honeysuckle that covered the porch, and fell on my upturned face."
"Have you ever been at sea in a dense fog, when it seemed as if a tangible white darkness shut you in, and the great ship, tense and anxious, groped her way toward the shore with plummet and sounding-line, and you waited with beating heart for something to happen?"
"As the cool stream gushed over one hand she spelled into the other the word water, first slowly, then rapidly."
6. A narrative can be more engaging than a biography because a narrative gives specific details with good descriptions, and a biography is just lighly talking about things that have happened in your life.
7. - when my niece was born
- when my grandpa died
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Where i'm from

Where I’m From

I am from the white shutters on Pioneers Court

I’m from hopscotch with the kids in the neighborhood

I’m from scraped knees from learning to ride a bike

I am from Pattie and Jeff

From two older sisters and a niece

I’m from church every Sunday

I am from Thursday afternoons with my Mimi,

Sitting on her lap as she told me stories, and taking her black and brown trash cans to the curb

I am from pancakes at Bob Evans on Saturdays with my dad

I’m from gardens full of daffodils and roses

I’m from watching my mom crochet blankets

I’m from walking up to Graeter’s on summer nights after dinner

And getting chocolate ice cream all over my clothes

I’m from playing on the swing set in my backyard,

And seeing how fast we could go on the wavy yellow slide

I am from Christmas shopping every year with my Grandpa

I’m from the halls of Evening Street Elementary and Kilbourne Middle

to finally being at Thomas Worthington, then wanting to go back to my youth.

Although it is scary to grow up, I know that I will make new memories as I grow older

And I will always remember where I’m from.

1. Sometimes I like English classes because it gives me a chance to express myself. After I start writing it gets easier because sometimes starting off is hard when you get writers block.
2. I enjoy writing notes to friends, lists and poetry.
3. I like to read short stories, notes, lettersss, and magazines.
4. I really do not like writing research papers because they are so long and take forever to gather all the information.
5. B (I enjoy reading sometimes though)
6. I do enjoy class discussions because it gives everyone a chance to say what they feel about a certain topic. Then you can get to know your classmates better because you find out their views on things.
7. In a class discussion I usually contribute because I enjoy giving my opinion on things, but I don't like to be the center of attention and lead the discussion.
8. Outside of school I babysit/nanny, and help take care of my grandma.
9. Over the weekend I hungout with my friends, went to the mall, saw a movie, babysat, cleaned my room, and celebrated my grandma's birthday.
10. There isn't anything special that you have to do to better teach me.
11. What will the final exam be like?